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Heroes – Short Script Review (Available for Production) - posted by Zach Zupke

Heroes by Steven Clark

A father and son take a journey they were never supposed to make, on a day they’ll never forget.

I have a son. His name is Maxwell. I was unbelievably fortunate. I used to pick Maxwell up from school every day. No matter the “crisis” at work or the worldly event taking place, the earth was always spinning perfectly at 3:30 p.m.

When your child smiles up at you and grasps your hand like he’s been waiting for it all day, there’s no better feeling in life.

David Gonzales, a father in “Heroes“, is minutes away from that moment, sitting in his car in the elementary school parking lot. Just like other hum-drum day. So much so, David’s yawning into his cell phone.

            DAVID
Yeah. I’m here right now…
    (yawns)
No, I’m not gonna fall asleep… Oh,
don’t be silly. I’m not gonna forget
to pick up our son.

Then a man passes by in “dark clothes, black boots and a long bulky overcoat.” A fortuitous gust of wind opens the coat. “The muzzle of a rifle makes a brief but unmistakable appearance” and your stomach drops – as does the phone in David’s hand. He fumbles for the door handle; he’s going after the stranger. Absolutely whatever it takes.

A woman buzzes in at the front door, which stays open just long enough for the man in black to poke the muzzle through. He cracks open the door and lets himself in. The door remains open long enough for David to enter. But – tragically – he’s too late. The woman is crumpled on the floor; rivulets of blood everywhere. In other words: a parent’s worst nightmare.

Gun POPS ring out. Muffled screams down long corridors. David pounces on the gunman, and a struggle ensues. Wild punches. Bloody teeth clink on the floor. But the stranger’s still got the rifle. David reaches out for one last chance, then…POP.

David awakes in a “dark void,” a blurry alien-like form approaching. Soon, he recognizes the silhouette. It’s Leonard, his 6-year-old son.

            LEONARD
Hi, Daddy.

            DAVID
Hey, buddy. Oh, I missed you. I missed
you so much.

            LEONARD
I missed you, too.

The conversation that follows is priceless, one I would never spoil. You should read and experience this one yourself.

There may be some stories we never want to hear, but that doesn’t mean they shouldn’t be told.

“Heroes” may be one of them, but it will take a very brave director. One who has pulled into a school parking lot a thousand times. One who has navigated an on-rush of hundreds of children in a deafening hallway, looking for one smiling face. And one who knows there’s no better feeling in the world than a little hand holding yours so tight.

Give this script the proper treatment – and you’ll be a hero… yourself.

Budget: Not bad. One “school” location and a handful of actors.

About the writer: Based in upstate, NY, Steven Clark is the writer of over 30 short scripts, several of which are under option, in pre-production, or have already been made into films. On A Clear Night, a family Christmas feature aimed at a Hallmark Channel-type audience, is currently in the works. Steven can be reached at Steamroller138 (a) gmail.

About the reviewer: Zack Zupke is a writer in Los Angeles. He can be contacted via email at zzupke “AT” yahoo

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This screenplay may not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.

10 Comments so far

1.

Damien Michael Aulsberry
September 2nd, 2015 at 10:44 am

Beautifully written. Every parents worst nightmare. I know this sounds really weird but I found some solace in the ending. A hard subject handled expertly.
Well done Sir!!

2.

KP Mackie
September 2nd, 2015 at 1:54 pm

Riveting. Innocent intro pulled me in immediately.
Envisioned all of it. Someone needs to make this one quick!
So glad I didn’t read this before bed… 🙂

3.

KP Mackie
September 2nd, 2015 at 2:08 pm

Oops —

So rattled by this short and the previos TWV, I posted the previous review in wrong spot.

For HEROES —

Grabbed me by the throat…
The first part is particularly gut-wrenching because of the limited dialogue. A great device since it forces a reader/audience to pay attention. The second half is very moving.
Envisioned this one as well the entire time. Well done. 🙂

4.

Shawty
September 2nd, 2015 at 9:58 pm

It gave me groousebumps

5.

Steven Clark
September 4th, 2015 at 9:30 pm

Hey. Thanks for the kind words everyone. Really appreciate you all checking this one out!

6.

Masatotai
May 31st, 2017 at 10:43 pm

Hauntingly beautiful. This was very well done!

7.

Steven
June 1st, 2017 at 9:42 am

Thanks, Masatotai. Very glad you liked it.

8.

KP Mackie
June 9th, 2017 at 2:06 pm

Still gut-wrenching… 🙂

9.

Lauri
June 10th, 2017 at 6:44 pm

Wow! I literally got tears in my eyes and a lump in my throat, that’s beautifully written. I’m a father to an eight-year-old girl and also a screenwriter. Well done, Steven, well done…

10.

Steven
June 18th, 2017 at 12:28 pm

Thanks KP and Lauri! Most appreciated you took the time to read this!

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