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Wednesday, January 24, 2024

Original Script Sunday (has come on a Wednesday) - post author Don

Over on the Unproduced Scripts page are fifteen original scripts for your reading pleasure. And, as always, if you want to use these works, even for educational purposes, please, you must reach out to the author before proceeding.

– Don

Thursday, January 18, 2024

Devil’s Due - post author L. Chambers
Devil’s Due
(8 page western/horror short)
A gambler’s plan to rob a preacher meets unexpected resistance.

Okay, saddle up folks, and hang onto your hats cause you’re in for a wild ride with today’s script review of a Western-themed Horror/Thriller, bound to be a crowd-pleaser and have you on the edge of your seats.

Modern-day Westerns or Neo-Westerns have enjoyed a resurgence of late and that’s in large part due to their versatility in being able to successfully combine genres. You only need look at The Power of the Dog, Brokeback Mountain, Rango, Bone Tomahawk, and The Ballad of Buster Scruggs. The list goes on, and this is before we even touch on the popularity of television series like Yellowstone, and videogames such as Red Dead Redemption.

Western-themed Short scripts, however, are noticeably thin on the ground so I’m delighted to showcase Paul Knauer’s mini masterpiece of entertainment and whodunnit: Devil’s Due.

We fade in on –

INT. SALOON – DAY
A two-story den of iniquity. GUNFIGHTERS drink. The BARTENDER serves.
A PIANO PLAYER tickles the ivories.

We are summarily introduced to our hero of the piece, WALT. At least we think he’s the good guy. Only time will tell…

Walt is crusty and dusty – And enjoying that favourite old-west pastime of gambling.

Poker is his game and so far he’s doing very nicely thank you. That is until a man of the cloth enters this fine establishment and disturbs the ambience.

A PREACHER, 62, shuffles into the room, his collar more dirt brown than white.

The room falls SILENT.

The Preacher moves first to the bar, holds out a large burlap sack, already heavy with coins.

PREACHER
The treacherous and the lecherous
shall go to hell, ‘less they be saved first.

Now, I don’t know about you but in my neck of the woods first impressions count for a lot and spouting fire and brimstone is definitely not going engender generosity nor win you any popularity contests.
Walt feels the same way; most certainly not taking kindly to this stranger taking his hard earned, or at least
hard-won cash.

The preacher moves down the line soliciting donations from the bar patrons. When he reaches Walt’s table —

The GAMBLERS toss coins from their stacks–all, except Walt.

Walt, eyes straight ahead, tosses two cards onto the table.

WALT
I’ll take two.

You could cut the tension with a knife.

None of the Gamblers move. Not even the DEALER.

The Preacher reaches for a large stack of Walt’s coins–one of many.
But, Walt intercepts him, slamming his hand on top of the Preacher’s.

Now Walt’s not into courtin’ trouble so he scares up one single coin, tosses it into the bag.

But the Preacher is not happy.

He leans in, whispers to Walt…

PREACHER
There are them that give, them that
take. But, the devil always gets his due.

Sounds like a thinly veiled threat to me.

Preacher takes the bag of money, slinks off upstairs with his spoils.

Now if that wasn’t enough to put Walt off his game, two good ol’ boys burst into the saloon shortly thereafter and attempt to operate a little sting of their own.

DIRK, 32, his face as twisted as his teeth, and MARVIN, 33, prettier
than Dirk, but only because his hat rides so low.

You can tell just by looking at these two that they’re trouble with a capital T, and likely not pulling a full wagon – if you get my drift. They’re perfect for what Walt has in mind, however. After a quick round of poker in which Walt cunningly lets them think they got one over him, things are about to take a turn. Walt’s got bigger fish to fry than a lil ol’ card game and he’s about to make them an offer they can’t refuse.

WALT
There’s a preacher. New in town. Comes in
every day, converts the town’s guilt into money.
It’s a shakedown. Plain and simple. But, it’s a
good one. Very lucrative. I need you boys to
help me steal that big bag of shame he carries.

We split it three ways. You up for it?

They nod.

Hmm, a simple plan. Whatever could go wrong?

Sure enough as soon as Walt’s out of earshot, the boys decide splitting a bag of money down the middle sounds a whole lot better than divvying it up into thirds.

Ever heard of the saying: Never con a conman?

Okay, I’m not going to spill the beans on the rest of the plot, except to say that what follows is a doozy of a story that follows in the tradition of Fargo and No Country for Old Men. Writer Paul Knauer weaves a tangled web of lies, deceit, and double-cross with Devil’s Due, punctuating the narrative with eccentric characters, some lovely comedy touches, and a plot that delivers not one twist, but two.

Overall, what we have here is some darn tootin’ fine storytelling on our hands.

Word to the wise: You want to burn the breeze on this one cause there’s sure to be a stampede. Best get a wriggle on. No hedging your bets, just go all in and reap the rewards.

Read the Script and talk about it on the Discussion Board

Devil’s Due took out first place Writer’s Choice in the Simply Scripts August OWC, with the theme of Fever Dream.

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About the Writer: Paul Knauer is a produced screenwriter with two features in early development. His main focus is thrillers and slightly absurdist comedy with heart. But, Paul believes becoming a better writer requires pushing personal boundaries, so you’ll notice a thorough mix of genres in his portfolio. Much of his work has universal appeal, evidenced by successful productions in the UK, UAE, and US–and options in Australia, Russia, India, Canada, and Thailand. A recent feature of his was named a 2022 Nicholl Fellowship Quarterfinalist.

About the Reviewer: L.Chambers has been writing all her life – especially in her head, and on scraps of paper. It’s only in the last few years she began to get serious about screen-writing. Prior to this she worked in the Features Department for ABC TV as a Program Assistant, and trained as a FAD. She currently works as a freelance web-content editor and lives with her husband (also a screenwriter) in Sydney, Australia. L. Chambers can be reached at: libbych (a) hotmail.

Production Notes: Talented adult character actors and a few extras are needed for this one. Mostly interior scenes; someone who has a knack for set-dressing to recreate the wild west flavour. A creative director could easily implement a few workarounds to provide for the exterior scenes and the brief scene of actor on horseback. Minor SFX to provide additional ‘magic’. Alternatively, this is the perfect vehicle for you to show off your talents via classic 2D animation or photo real 3D, or if the writer allows to collaborate on graphic comic/novelisation of the project, and submit to sites such as hyperepics.com/

Sunday, January 7, 2024

Original Script Sunday for January 7, 2024 - post author Don

Over on the Unproduced scripts page are twelve original scripts for your reading pleasure.

– Don

Sunday, December 31, 2023

Original Script Sunday for December 31st 2023 - post author Don

Over on the Unproduced Scripts page are seven original scripts for your reading pleasure.

– Don

Sunday, December 17, 2023

Original Script Sunday - post author Don

Over on the Unproduced scripts page are ten scripts, unproduced and original for your reading pleasure.
– Don

Tuesday, December 12, 2023

Original script Sunday (came on a Tuesday) - post author Don

Over on the Original scripts page are fourteen scripts for your reading pleasure.

– Don

Monday, December 11, 2023

The Gambler – Available for production* - post author Paul Knauer

THE GAMBLER
(5-page short drama)
by Gary Howell

A man diagnosed with a terminal illness makes a drastic choice.

What would you do if you discovered you only had a couple of weeks to live? The Gambler by Gary Howell asks its main character just that question as 35-year-old Joe Ferguson receives the news that nobody wants to hear:

       DR. WILLISTON
The cancer you have is almost
undetectable until it’s too late.

Would your answer change if you lived just minutes from the famed Las Vegas Strip—if you could literally see it from your kitchen window? That’s the entirety of the setup that Howell creates for The Gambler. A lonely, obviously risk-averse man faces a terminal illness in a city known for taking big shots.

How do we know that Joe is risk-averse? Howell deftly sets things up with several simple clues: He describes Joe’s Las Vegas home as “threadbare, sparsely decorated.” Big-spender Joe eats a bowl of cereal for dinner, sorting through a steady parade of bills. And, we soon find out, Joe is sitting on a pile of cash. Add it all up: Joe is a saver, reluctant even to spend his money on his own bills.

That’s the heart of The Gambler, as we watch one piece of information—imminent death—transform someone into a completely new person. The Saver instantly becomes The Gambler.

What’s particularly interesting, though, is how Howell sets up Joe’s mindset for the big moment through a simple exchange with a friend.

       JOE
What am I going to do, go to Paris?
I’ll be in hospice before you know it,
and that’ll be fully covered by my
medical insurance.

       BUCK
And if you win?

Joe finally stops, faces Buck.

       JOE
This is Vegas, Buck. Nobody wins
in Vegas except the house.

Joe knows he’s going to lose. So, why does he want to risk all of his money on one round of blackjack? Is it truly only that he has nothing to lose? Maybe. It’s open for interpretation, but I see the moment as Joe saying to death: “You can’t take everything from me if I take it from me first.” Whatever his motivation, he’s plowing straight ahead. 

Soon, he’s sitting at the table.

       DEALER
Cards coming out.

The first card comes to Joe face down, then the dealer deals himself a card down.

The next card to Joe comes face up. An eight. Joe frowns, but not nearly as hard as he does when the dealer’s next card comes up — an ace.

       BUCK
Shit.

Joe flips his under card over. It’s another eight.

       DEALER
Sixteen.

       JOE
Welp. Maybe this wasn’t such a
good idea after all.

He drums his fingers on the table. After what seems like an eternity considering it:

It’s the moment Howell has been setting up from page one: the choice. How far will Joe take this? Well, I’m not going to leave you hanging. Yet.

       JOE
Hit me.

The dealer takes the next card, flips it over and slides it in front of Joe.

Joe sucks in what seems like all the oxygen in the room. It’s a three.

       DEALER
Nineteen.

Joe waves his hand over the cards. Gets up from his chair and as the dealer flips over his hole card, we– 

SMASH CUT TO: 

EXT. BELLAGIO HOTEL – AFTERNOON 

Now I’m going to leave you hanging! But, don’t fret, it could be worse. I’ll let Howell explain: “I had toyed with the idea of a ‘Sopranos’ type ending where you think you know what happened, but aren’t necessarily sure because it would cut to black after Joe steps out of the casino. In giving it more consideration, I thought that in a 5-page script like this one, the reader (and ultimately, the viewer of the film) really wants to have a resolution, and I think the way it ended tied things up, but also allows the reader to imagine what happens with the character afterward.”

Of course, I’m going to make you read the script itself to know what Howell decided. Anything else wouldn’t be as fun. And, in the end, that’s what Howell’s script is: fun. Yes, it’s a drama. Yes, there are heavy themes. But, anybody familiar with Howell’s previous work knows, he writes from the heart, and with a certain, very personal, style. He’s not afraid to write about tragedy or personal heartbreak, but when he does, there’s always another layer. Howell explained. “Being who I am, I’ve always tried to find some sort of positivity and humor in all situations and will try to inject that into my scripts.” The Gambler has that extra layer. It’s well worth the read and definitely worthy of production.

Production Notes: At first glance, the production challenges look daunting for a short: Las Vegas, Bellagio, the fountains…unless you’re looking for an excuse to write off a trip to Vegas, it might seem too much. Howell wants you to look closer, “I think this can actually be filmed using a lot of stock footage of Vegas—it doesn’t have to be big budget. At its heart, this is a character-driven story and can be shot in a minimalistic way.” 

Locations: A doctor’s office, a sparse residence, Las Vegas strip, Bellagio exterior and interior.

**The Gambler by Gary Howell received the Writer’s Choice Award in SimplyScripts’ September ’23 One Week Challenge.

Read the Script and talk about it on the Discussion Board

About the Writer: Gary Howell is a native Texan, yet still doesn’t own a cowboy hat. He practiced law for 17 years before finally scratching a life-long itch and started writing short and feature films. He’s had four of his short films produced, one feature optioned and has worked with producer Matthew George (“LBJ”, “Wind River”). Coverfly featured his TV pilot “Bounty” in a recent live virtual table read.

About the Reviewer: Paul Knauer is a produced screenwriter with two features in early development. His main focus is thrillers and slightly absurdist comedy with heart. But, Paul believes becoming a better writer requires pushing personal boundaries, so you’ll notice a thorough mix of genres in his portfolio. Much of his work has universal appeal, evidenced by successful productions in the UK, UAE, and US–and options in Australia, Russia, India, Canada, and Thailand. A recent feature of his was named a 2022 Nicholl Fellowship Quarterfinalist.

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*This screenplay may not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.

Sunday, November 26, 2023

Original Script Sunday - post author Don

Over on the Unproduced Scripts page are 20 original scripts for your reading pleasure.

– Don

Sunday, November 19, 2023

Original Script Sunday - post author Don

Over on the Unproduced Scripts page are twelve scripts for your reading pleasure.

– Don

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