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Thursday, December 28, 2017

Initiation – Short Script Review (Back on the market) - post author Guest Reviewer

Initiation by Pia Cook

A car, a man and a girl. And a life-ending threat if you don’t… drive!

Imagine this scenario: You’re a black man who just accepted a promotion; about to “pop the question” to your lady. Which is when a 14 year old white girl hops in your car, and starts barking orders. She’s going to scream rape if you don’t…. drive!

How can a guy get out of a situation this grave? How can one fight back, yet emerge unscathed?

Reminiscent of 1997’s The Game (Michael Douglas and Sean Penn), Pia Cook’s Initiation takes us on a nail biting car ride; one which has no brakes.

Nico’s the captive driver. And Amara? The out-of-control teen calling the shots.

When we first meet Nico, life seems to be going his way. There’s that promotion he’s worked his tail off for. He’s on the phone with his girlfriend – sharing the news, and planning the evening’s festivities. On his celebration short list: roses, chocolates, wine.. and a shiny engagement ring. In fact, Nico’s just bought condoms. Tonight’s going to be perfect. He thinks.

But that’s when skinny blonde Amara hops in: issuing orders and threatening Nico instantly.

Fearing for his livelihood, a terrified Nico complies. As he steers the car, Amara tears through his newly purchased gifts with abandon. Spilling wine, eating chocolates. Throwing condoms around the car. Nico’s so cowed by Amara’s random threats that he’s willing to do every little thing he’s told.

Things get particularly tense when the cops pull them over. Amara insists Nico follow her lead. He’s got to trust her, and keep his mouth shut. If so, she’ll get him out of trouble. Maybe.

What’s the game Amara’s playing? And whatever it is, will Nico survive?

A perfect short thriller, Initiation’s got all the ingredients you need: a fast paced script with a simple setup – one that delivers tons of conflict, emotional range and a spectacular twist. Despite featuring only two actors, there’s tons of meat to dig into here. Just imagine – the dramatic timing of The Game, with the intensity of Speed. Speaking of which: speed up and grab this one – before some other lucky Director wins the race!

Budget: Pretty low. Make sure your actors have perfect timing and chemistry!

About the writer: Born and raised in Sweden, Pia Cook is director of the short film Them That’s Dead and writer of produced feature films Finders Keepers: The Root of All Evil and Blackout. She started writing screenplays in 2006 and has written over sixty short screenplays and ten features. She can be reached at gatortales – “AT” – gmail.

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About the reviewerRachel Kate Miller is a veteran of the feature animation industry, having worked on several Oscar winning films, bringing stories to life. In 2012, she left animation to move to Chicago and run the design department for President Obama’s reelection campaign. She is now living in New York, writing, consulting on various projects and creating an educational animated series for elementary students focused on engaging kids in science. She is now heavily engaged in her new project, being a Mom.

Sunday, December 24, 2017

Thank You - post author Don

I’m off enjoying the holidays, but I wanted to say a brief thank you to everyone who has supported the site over the year. Particular thanks to Pia, Bert and Sean without whom the discussion board would not exist. Thank you to everyone who has run a challenge and commented on a script. Thank you to everyone who has contributed to the screenwriting community. There are too many people to name so I will not try.

It has been a banner year for members getting work optioned and produced. By my best rough count, there have been over a hundred scripts optioned as a result of being on the site. This says more about us as a community helping each other out than it does about the site itself. The community is not the site, but the people who contribute to it.

Also, since the advertising on the site has been more than enough to cover hosting and bandwidth, we’ve been able to donate roughly $800 over the course of the year to film projects and writing labs.

Best wishes of the season to all, Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

– Don

Thursday, December 21, 2017

Get Out screenplay – For Your consideration - post author Don

Thanks Dean for the heads up. Universal has finally released…

Get Out – Undated, unspecified draft script by Jordan Peele – hosted by: Universal – in pdf format

It’s time for a young African American to meet with his white girlfriend’s parents for a weekend in their secluded estate in the woods, but before long, the friendly and polite ambience will give way to a nightmare.

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Tuesday, December 19, 2017

Nothing Like the Sun screenplay - post author Don

Thanks to N. Nguyen for the heads up on the screenplay to his film, Nothing Like The Sun that is making the festival circuit and will be release early part of 2018. Also, check out Horsehead Cinema for background info on the film.

Nothing Like The Sun – April 9, 2016 final shooting draft script by Nguyen Nguyen & Steven J. Morrison (based on “Misfit Affection: The Strange Case of Alice Mitchell and Freda Ward” printed July 19, 1892 by the Aurora Daily Express) – hosted by: Horsehead Cinema – in pdf format

In the mid-20th century, a lesbian estranged by her family struggles to get them back by falsely adopting the faith of a Christian household where she takes shelter, but finds herself infatuated with their daughter.

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Monday, December 18, 2017

Original Script Sunday (has come on a Monday) - post author Don

Thirty two original scripts up on the Original Scripts page.

– Don

Saturday, December 16, 2017

Films Stars Don’t Die in Liverpool, The Leisure Seeker, and Foxtrot screenplays – For Your Consideration - post author Don

Sony Classics releases three more…

The Leisure Seeker – Undated, unspecified draft script by Stephen Amidon Francesca Archibugi Francesco Piccolo Paolo Virzì (Based on the book by Michael Zadoorian) – hosted by: Sony Classics – in pdf format

A runaway couple go on an unforgettable journey in the faithful old RV they call The Leisure Seeker, traveling from Boston to The Ernest Hemingway Home in Key West. They recapture their passion for life and their love for each other on a road trip that provides revelation and surprise right up to the very end.

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Films Stars Don’t Die in Liverpool – Undated, unspecified draft script by Matt Greenhalgh (Based on the book by Peter Turner) – hosted by: Sony Classics – in pdf format

A romance sparks between a young actor and a Hollywood leading lady.

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Foxtrot – Undated, unspecified draft script by Samuel Maoz – hosted by: Sony Classics – in pdf format

A troubled family face the facts when something goes terribly wrong at their son’s desolate military post.

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Friday, December 15, 2017

Coco screenplay – For Your Consideration - post author Don

Disney’s Coco is out

(and The Shape of Water is finally back, too)

Coco – Undated, unspecified draft script by Adrian Molina and Matthew Aldrich (Original Story By Lee Unkrich, Jason Katz, Matthew Aldrich, Adrian Molina) – hosted by: Disney – in pdf format

Despite his family’s baffling generations-old ban on music, Miguel dreams of becoming an accomplished musician like his idol, Ernesto de la Cruz. Desperate to prove his talent, Miguel finds himself in the stunning and colorful Land of the Dead following a mysterious chain of events. Along the way, he meets charming trickster Hector, and together, they set off on an extraordinary journey to unlock the real story behind Miguel’s family history.

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Thursday, December 14, 2017

Christmas Crime Story – Interview with the Director - post author Don

Some nice things about the SimplyScripts community were said in this interview with Christmas Crime Story director Richard Friedman.

You can watch this on Amazon Prime and iTunes

You can read more about the script here.

Wednesday, December 13, 2017

The Origin of Fear – Short Script Review – Available for Production - post author Don

The Origin of Fear (12 pages in pdf format) by Mark Renshaw

A university student working on a thesis about fear, stumbles across a technique for identifying dangerous individuals. Her latest experiment takes a lethal twist when it becomes apparent her work is gaining the wrong type of attention.

Leona decides to approach her phobia in a different way. She wants the subject of fear to be her thesis at the university. One by one, she interviews students in an attempt to understand what they are afraid of at a given point of their lives. All goes well until she stumbles upon Imogen.

Production: Characters – 2 main, 2 episodical, 2 extras; Location – 1 café; Effects – make-up and prosthesis.

About the Writer: Mark Renshaw can be reached through his website at An award-winning producer and director, his last project earned ‘Best Sci-Fi’ at the Top Shorts and Festigious film festivals.

This is an October 2017 One Week Challenge is a short. The OWC is a screenwriting exercise wherein writers are given a week to write a short script on the theme and genre provided. These are quickly done and may be a little rough around the edges considering the short time frame in which they are written.

This screenplay may not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.

About the reviewer: Khamanna Iskandarova has several features completed, as well as a dozen shorts, some of which have been independently produced. Khamanna can be reached at khamanna (a) hotmail. Check out her IMDB Creds

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