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Waterfall – Short Script Review (Available for Production) - post author KP Mackie

Waterfall (pdf format) by Marnie Mitchell

A couple’s constant arguing during a marathon has dire consequences.

Where do story ideas come from? Everywhere. A “what if” idea, a haunting song, a passing image in a mirror. Fleeting memories from childhood… When you’re a writer, everything is game. All you need is a fun idea, and a unique twist to make it fresh…

The inspiration for Waterfall comes from a bit of Americana we all share (and no, STS ain’t gonna tell.) That, and an element most of us can relate to: petty fighting and relationships.

…a couple struggle up a hillside; the last two in a long line. It’s a Warrior Dash type marathon, and neither one is doing well. On top of that, they’re bickering – the barbs getting more heated with every step. She’s thirsty. He dropped their water bottle and broke it. And now he’s slowing them both down. It’s her negative attitude, he replies. He’s tired of the constant bitching…

The fighting escalates to fever pitch. Then, finally, something gives.

A rock – under her feet. Plunging them both into peril. Especially when he loses his footing as well….

Is Waterfall a survivalist drama? Not exactly. More like a tongue in cheek homage. Once the situation escalates, the inspiration comes clear – driven home by the final line before Fade Out.

If you’re a director that enjoys puns in visual form, Waterfall’s likely to be your cup of tea – a twinkling star of a comedy sketch, bringing a smile to the face of jaded readers…

Pages: 3

Budget: Minimal. Locate a hill, and a fit couple willing to do some physical activity. Not a monumental challenge.

About the Writer: An award winning writer AND photographer, Marnie Mitchell’s website is available at Marnie’s had 5 shorts produced (so far) and placed Semi-final with her features in BlueCat. Marnie can be contacted via her website.

About the reviewer: California uber reader/reviewer KP Mackie is working hard on her animated feature and maybe an update to her bio?

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7 Comments so far


December 3rd, 2014 at 7:54 am

Thanks for another review KP!

This one will probably be lost on anyone not from America. 🙂

This is the first screenplay I ever wrote. Wrote it in 2002, fixed it up in 2009. First short of now over 70. 🙂


Sherri Williams
December 3rd, 2014 at 1:21 pm

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this and was immediately drawn in by the characters. I can see and hear the very familiar feeling dialogue. As a matter of fact I ALREADY chose sides. Cant wait to see this story on the big screen.


Henry Christner
December 3rd, 2014 at 3:20 pm

Nifty little version, Ms. Goose. I laughed when I realized what was what.


December 3rd, 2014 at 5:01 pm

Thanks Sherri and Henry. Hopefully someone will want to film it. 🙂 🙂


Scott Merrow
December 3rd, 2014 at 6:42 pm

This is a really good one. Very funny. I liked it when it was on MoviePoet, and I still like it.

The scene where the man falls reminds me of this…

It’s just as funny. (And there’s a punchline.)


December 3rd, 2014 at 8:29 pm

Sweet merciful crap…I may have inadvertently stolen from The Simpsons! LOL. I was addicted to the show for many years. 😉 🙂 Homer fell a lot better, I think.


October 30th, 2016 at 5:34 pm

Absolutely lovely. I hope it would be filmed.

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