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Friday, October 9, 2015

Bloom – Short Script Review (Available for Production!) - posted by David M Troop

Bloom

A young rapper enters a rap battle in hopes to win the ultimate prize.

“The reveal.”  That’s the point in the movie where the audience drops its jaw and realizes that for the past ninety minutes they’ve been watching a different film altogether.  If done correctly, it can turn a great movie into a classic film.

Bloom, written by Jean-Pierre Chapoteau, takes us to the inner city projects – a setting we’ve already seen in such films as Boyz In The Hood and 8 Mile.  As the intro scene unwinds, two teenagers – Jeff and Darnel – head toward a house-party with thumping rap music blasting out the windows.

Darnel intends to challenge an infamous rapper named Clips, but Jeff warns Darnel that one false move or even one bad rhyme could get them both killed.

Jeff pleads with Darnel to take things slow, “plant the seed,” and live to rap another day.  However, Darnel has his eye on the prize, and taking on Clips in a rap battle is the only way to win.

Clips accepts Darnel’s challenge and his two hundred dollars.  After Clips’ rhymes bring the crowd to frenzy, he turns the mic over to Darnel – who finds himself trapped in a lion’s den with only his words to save him.

Darnel takes the mic, exhales slowly, and instructs the DJ to kill the beat. And something unexpected and quite wonderful happens then.

The reveal.

At that crucial point, author JP Chapoteau pulls the rug out from under the audience and turns the script on its head.  After we’re able to close our mouths, a smile slowly forms. Permanently.

Bloom is the perfect screenplay for a director who knows and appreciates the world of rap music.  And it’s also a chance to tell the story of a young urban man who risks his life so that he may live it. For real.

Pages: 5

Budget:  Small to medium.  A house-party and DJ.  Two very talented young actor/rappers.

About the Guest Reviewer: David M Troop resumed writing in 2011 after a twenty-five year hiatus.  Since then, he has written about 50 short scripts, two of which have been produced.   Dave would like to make it three.  He is a regular, award-winning contributor to MoviePoet.com.  Born on the mean streets of Reading, PA, Dave now resides in Schuylkill Haven with his wife Jodi and their two lazy dogs Max and Mattie. He can be reached at dtroop506 “AT” gmail!

About the Author: Jean-Pierre Chapoteau started writing feature-length scripts in 2005, then focused on shorts in 2009. Since then he’s had three scripts produced and two more optioned. He has won several awards for his shorts and has become a moderator at the site MoviePoet, who specialize in the craft of the short scripts. Jean-Pierre was a finalist in the RAW TALENT Competition for his faith-based feature-length script: ‘Far From Perfect.’ And was also a semi-finalist in the SLAMDANCE teleplay competition and a finalist in the OBSWRITER teleplay contest for his adapted teleplay, Curb Your Enthusiasm: The Guardian. You can contact Jean-Pierre Chapoteau at: Jeanpierre_4_25 “AT” msn(dot) com

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3 Comments so far

1.

Leslie
October 9th, 2015 at 8:33 pm

I loved it! I’m an up-and-coming screenwriter/director/actress lol and I’m trying to learn the art of short film! This was a great example of how to leave the audience speechless!

2.

Anthony
October 10th, 2015 at 4:48 am

Loved this script, good work JP!

3.

KP Mackie
October 10th, 2015 at 2:30 pm

Amazing dialogue in this peek into a specific world.
A bang-up ending. Well done. 🙂

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