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Friday, September 11, 2015

Stone Cold Sober – Short Script Review - posted by wonkavite

Stone Cold Sober

When a man confronts a woman that’s tailing him, he learns she’s his future daughter, who knows about an awful crime he’s yet to commit.

Edith Piaf famously sang about having no regrets. Well, she was lucky. Most of us have regrets. Something we wish we’d done. Something we wish we hadn’t. But what if you had the chance, that one opportunity to go back and fix the past? Time travel films have massive appeal to audiences for this very reason, like Back to The Future and Terminator 2. The idea that you can change the past, or undo a terrible mistake – that’s a universal, crowd-pleasing premise.

And that’s exactly what Stone Cold Sober serves up today.

The script revs up the tension on Page One. Protagonist Natalie’s in her car, following Renee. They’re both in their thirties. She watches him taking out another woman, so it’s safe to assume he’s cheating. Right?

But no! This isn’t an ordinary drama. As Natalie continues to stalk Rene, we discover his favourite hangout is the liquor store. He’s a heavy drinker, to say the least. Ironically, the liquor store is where Natalie and Rene have their first encounter. Rene’s confused by Natalie’s claim – that she’s his daughter from the future. But the stuff Natalie knows – personal stuff – finally convinces Rene she’s telling the truth.

When Natalie and Rene begin to bond as father and daughter, they prove that blood isn’t just thicker than water. It’s thicker than time and space, too.

But Natalie’s there with a purpose – to stop Rene from committing a terrible crime. She pulls a gun on Rene, putting their very existence on the line. After a struggle, Rene disarms Natalie… it looks like she’s failed to stop him. But has she? Or has Rene learned enough about himself and what the future holds, to make the changes he really should?

Take a peek at Stone Cold Sober today and find out. Full of grit and drama, this smart little script is a great time travelling saga. Overlooking it could be one of your biggest regrets.

Pages: 8

Budget/Cast: Low (which we love) and a cast of 3. Simple!

About the writer, C.J. Walley:  I began writing in 2012 and I’m pleased to say it’s been very exciting so far. I have been fortunate enough to have a short produced by a director in London and Amazon Studios have spotlighted one of my features as a notable project. My scripts place within the top 10% of various major screenwriting competitions and, as I continue to write new specs, I am remotely collaborating with a producers, directors, and actors in LA, NYC, New Orleans, Atlanta, Washington DC, Zurich, Amsterdam, Sydney, and Dallas while occasionally blogging for Stage 32.  If you’re an aspiring filmmaker, then I’d love to join forces with you whatever the scale, do not hesitate to reach out and drop me a line. (CJ “AT” CJwalley DOT COM;

About the Reviewer: Elaine Clayton is a London-based screenwriter, who has written several well-received shorts and is currently working on her first feature length scripts. Comfortable in a broad range of genres, Elaine has an innate sense of structure and arc development. Contact her at Elaine_clayton (AT) Hotmail(.)co(.)uk





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2 Comments so far


KP Mackie
September 12th, 2015 at 3:10 pm

Intriguing story idea.
Love all the visual, and the minimal amount of dialogue is a true attention-getter. Two of my favorite elements in a screenplay. Keeps me a fan.
Oh, and fun to find my birthday, “April tenth,” arbitrarily in a script. Thanks for the smile. 🙂


CJ Walley
September 13th, 2015 at 8:48 am

You’re always so kind, KP 🙂 Bit of a coincidence with the birthdate! I pretty much plucked that date from thin air.

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