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Tuesday, December 23, 2014

The Price – Short Script Review (Available for Production) - posted by wonkavite

The Price

A desperate woman struggles with the high price of the one thing she wants most – her dead son brought to life.

Movies. They’re both a complex and a simple thing. Films today are an intricate web of creative arts – writing, directing, cinematography, FX. Stories chock full of complicated twists and turns.

Yet –when one digs down deep… The most successful films work off a simple formula – dealing with basic, raw human emotion. Love. Loss. Tragic grief.

Such is the case with The Price: a supernatural story of a woman who lost her son. And would do anything to get him back.

Ostensibly set in medieval times, The Price opens with middle aged Berith – giving birth in a lonely cottage. Her elderly mid-wife assists as best she can. But in the end, the act is futile. Berith’s child – a son – is stillborn.

An outcast in her village, Berith buries the infant alone. She grieves alone, as well – having lost the only thing that matters in her world.

…until Berith happens upon a traveling Mystic. And strikes an awful deal. In return for certain “favors”, the Mystic teaches Berith how to summon her son. Via a spell that works only once a year. And requires payment – in blood.

Over the years, Berith visits her son’s grave… bringing fresh victims as sacrifice. As time drags on, the demands of the spell grow more numerous. More corpses for the demons. And yet Berith perseveres; content to watch her son age with the years. Two. Six. Fifteen. Eventually, he’s a young adult. Handsome. Proud. Perfect.

…but the grisly crimes have changed Berith as well. Has the Price finally become too steep – denying Berith her Son’s love as well?

A poetic psalm to love and loss, The Price is sure to be a crowd pleaser, especially with the right atmospheric touch!

About the writer: An award winning writer, Bill Sarre has had scripts place both finalist and quarter finalist with Page and Bluecat. Bill can be reached at Bill.sarre “AT” gmail.com

Pages: 13

Budget: Although FX heavy as written, The Price’s story is adaptable to lower budgets – with no loss in effectiveness.

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3 Comments so far

1.

KP Mackie
December 24th, 2014 at 12:25 am

Heart wrenching. So much emotion.
The details are wonderful. Immediately transported me into this fantasy world.
Poor Berith…

2.

marnieml
December 25th, 2014 at 3:59 pm

Anything Bill Sarre writes is very atmospheric. This is a touching story with a very eerie vibe. Great visuals too.

3.

Richardr
December 30th, 2014 at 12:25 pm

Good work. Effective use of transition sounds. Two items stuck out to me. One, the dad who tells his daughter to steer clear. Does he have to give a reason? Would a dad in this village need to give a reason? Does the audience need to know? It’s enough to know she’s shunned.

Two, the ending. It seems a bit too pat. She stumbles back into the jaws. Although I like the idea of him going back, her struggles for naught, could she plan all along to be the tenth victim? She makes the ultimate sacrifice only to have him reject it. Toss in a village posse about to get her, and you increase the stakes. Just a thought.

It was an enjoyable read.

Best

Richard

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