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Friday, November 4, 2011

Little Lucy – Filmed - post author Don

Little Lucy by William Nicholas Clay

A private eye struggles to solve the case of a missing girl. – Short, Drama 5 pages – pdf, format

Little Lucy (2011) from William Nicholas Clay on Vimeo.

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Mariam
November 9th, 2011 at 3:48 pm

William
It appears you have a lot to learn about directing. You are not there. But keeping at it.
Your lighting is very broad, try to be more in-sync (artistic without being amateur). And that desk, wrong prop, re film that and get a real dirty old one. And your choice of bg music is too goofy and campusish. And you, jumping from frame to frame without thinking it out. Learn to draw. Take a paper draw each scene it out like Ridley Scott does. And 80% of this short can be taken out. You got to understand first impression. For example, if James Cameron saw this, he would say – no promise, this is nothing and you got to RE FILM THIS! Only a tad here and there shines, but as I said, you have to re film this with more soul searching.
Mariam

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Ryan
February 22nd, 2012 at 1:56 pm

It was alright. Like the camera work alot.You would change the background music though, to one that sets the mood better. I thhink the lighting was okay, though it could improve. Like I said, the camera work was great, so keep doing it the way you did it. However overall, it was an alright flick. Worth watching.

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